I think even “I said you might want to!” is too much. It smacks of a shoddy American sitcom where they say these non-jokes to cue the canned laughter. If they insist on having four panels, they could have a third panel with the two going through some security rigmarole, maybe stick in a few subtle visual jokes.
shift 1,2,3 to 2,3,4 and have 1 as an establishing shot of the nsa hq to make the setup clearer. right now it’s like you see the punchline, then an extra panel, then go back to see what was the big deal and realize somewhere in the background it says nsa hq.
Could’ve been better without the fourth panel, I feel.
I think if you just remove her speech balloon, it works:
I think even “I said you might want to!” is too much. It smacks of a shoddy American sitcom where they say these non-jokes to cue the canned laughter. If they insist on having four panels, they could have a third panel with the two going through some security rigmarole, maybe stick in a few subtle visual jokes.
shift 1,2,3 to 2,3,4 and have 1 as an establishing shot of the nsa hq to make the setup clearer. right now it’s like you see the punchline, then an extra panel, then go back to see what was the big deal and realize somewhere in the background it says nsa hq.
Well I did see the “NSA Headquarters” sign but I admit it’d be weird to have that on the wall in the office of the madam who might want to see things!