• spujb@lemmy.cafe
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    15 hours ago
    slight off topic but trying to contribute positively

    ooh its always so interesting to come across these. writing clear and effective english is a learned skill that isn’t the same as writing “correct” english. the author seems to rely heavily on indirect and passive phrases and poor preposition use which leads to a wandering feeling:

    Monolith continued work on Legacy for several years with the thought it would have enough sway due to the success it has generated in the past that it would be able to convince WB to pursue the new IP. However, that dream died in 2021 when WB Games canceled the project, which resulted in Monolith’s entire leadership, including many other developers, leaving the studio to go and form what is now Cliffhanger Games with EA.

    here’s the same quote, “fixed”:

    Monolith continued development of Legacy for several years, under the assumption that the IP’s past success would maintain WB’s interest in its future. That dream died with the cancellation of the project in 2021, during which Monolith’s entire leadership and many developers separated from the studio to form what is now EA’s Cliffhanger Games.

    it’s possible english isn’t the author’s first language, or they simply don’t have the communications education you are used to seeing in journalism. at least you know it’s not ai though :)